Do you know the silence of suicide?
27 December 2010
Do you know the silence of suicide?
One faint step, and there you hang;
In the balances of past and present,
Executed by your own demise.
And when the minute hand stopped,
So did the lives of all those
Attached to your arms.
You said,
If you knew would you save me?
Now I say,
If you knew would you still have left?
We pay the toll of ultimate suffering,
and the debt of your last lively action.
And everyday since,
we don’t die, even though you’ve killed us.
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This is a strong message and it rings true with good words. Thank you.
This is so heartfelt and true.
I learned from a friend of mine what the reality of suicide is.
You did well and this song makes me miss her all over again.
Thanks Brennan. I am glad to be a voice for those left behind.
powerful imagery,
very sense making message, lovely delivery.
🙂
Happy Rally!
Thanks Jingle. Looking forward to being part of a forum of creative thinkers.
OMG, that was beautiful. The imagery, the wording, the flow, just everything. Perfect!
I’m so sorry. Someone dear to me went through the same thing. I hope you are alright!
Just know that you are loved!
~~Aynsley
i’m lost for words!
Wow. Just wow. Usually I can find words that sum up what I feel but wow is all I can find. Thank you for writing this, it’s beautiful and expresses so much.
I also read your poem. I am sorry for your suffering. Please continue to reach out, as some days the lines become blurry. Looking forward to following your post.
Thought provoking…deeply poignant…the last stanza was eye opening. A great poem. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for accepting a little piece of wounded me.
i think this is an absolutely marvellous write! mine for this thursday- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/14/hunger/
Nice 🙂
here’s mine
it hit me so hard.. tremendous!!
~ http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/sunshine-on-my-shoulder/
Hurts. Let go.
The emotion in this is intense and raw. I found myself nodding while reading it. I don’t have a loved one who committed suicide, but there’s one who’s reckless. We tell him that if his recklessness kills him, he’ll kill us, too. Our bodies won’t die, maybe, but something essential inside will.
😦 Well written piece!
Glad that somehow, I was able to save someone from suicide’s inviting comfort. But what hurts me is that I was still left behind…
Thank you for this.
Cha
Powerful poem. I had a friend who had to deal with someone’s suicide. Definitely reminded me of her situation. Extremely beautiful poem.
And when the minute hand stopped,
So did the lives of all those
Attached to your arms.
My favorite lines, a lot of emotion attached.
Nice work. Profound thoughts