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Do you know the silence of suicide?

27 December 2010

Do you know the silence of suicide?

One faint step, and there you hang;

                In the balances of past and present,

                                Executed by your own demise.

 

And when the minute hand stopped,

                So did the lives of all those

                                Attached to your arms.

 

You said,

If you knew would you save me?

Now I say,

                  If you knew would you still have left?

 

We pay the toll of ultimate suffering,

                and the debt of your last lively action.

        And everyday since,

                we don’t die, even though you’ve killed us.

Jingle

 

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23 Comments leave one →
  1. 1 January 2011 5:00 am

    This is a strong message and it rings true with good words. Thank you.

  2. brennanbogert permalink
    5 January 2011 4:23 pm

    This is so heartfelt and true.
    I learned from a friend of mine what the reality of suicide is.
    You did well and this song makes me miss her all over again.

  3. 5 January 2011 4:32 pm

    powerful imagery,

    very sense making message, lovely delivery.
    🙂

    Happy Rally!

    • 5 January 2011 8:34 pm

      Thanks Jingle. Looking forward to being part of a forum of creative thinkers.

  4. 5 January 2011 5:41 pm

    OMG, that was beautiful. The imagery, the wording, the flow, just everything. Perfect!

  5. 5 January 2011 6:31 pm

    I’m so sorry. Someone dear to me went through the same thing. I hope you are alright!
    Just know that you are loved!
    ~~Aynsley

  6. 5 January 2011 7:58 pm

    i’m lost for words!

  7. 5 January 2011 8:29 pm

    Wow. Just wow. Usually I can find words that sum up what I feel but wow is all I can find. Thank you for writing this, it’s beautiful and expresses so much.

    • 5 January 2011 9:45 pm

      I also read your poem. I am sorry for your suffering. Please continue to reach out, as some days the lines become blurry. Looking forward to following your post.

  8. 5 January 2011 9:12 pm

    Thought provoking…deeply poignant…the last stanza was eye opening. A great poem. Thank you for sharing.

  9. 5 January 2011 11:20 pm

    i think this is an absolutely marvellous write! mine for this thursday- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/14/hunger/

  10. 6 January 2011 9:11 am

    Nice 🙂

    here’s mine

    http://hindawy.wordpress.com/2010/12/24/home-is-not-here/

  11. 6 January 2011 12:35 pm

    it hit me so hard.. tremendous!!
    ~ http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/sunshine-on-my-shoulder/

  12. 6 January 2011 2:59 pm

    Hurts. Let go.

  13. 6 January 2011 7:47 pm

    The emotion in this is intense and raw. I found myself nodding while reading it. I don’t have a loved one who committed suicide, but there’s one who’s reckless. We tell him that if his recklessness kills him, he’ll kill us, too. Our bodies won’t die, maybe, but something essential inside will.

  14. 8 January 2011 4:10 pm

    😦 Well written piece!

  15. 8 January 2011 4:58 pm

    Glad that somehow, I was able to save someone from suicide’s inviting comfort. But what hurts me is that I was still left behind…

    Thank you for this.

    Cha
    http://chaspalette.wordpress.com/2011/01/07/photograph/

  16. 8 January 2011 5:36 pm

    Powerful poem. I had a friend who had to deal with someone’s suicide. Definitely reminded me of her situation. Extremely beautiful poem.

    And when the minute hand stopped,

    So did the lives of all those

    Attached to your arms.
    My favorite lines, a lot of emotion attached.

  17. Kate permalink
    9 January 2011 8:52 pm

    Nice work. Profound thoughts

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